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Not nearly enough abuse, I'm afraid, so I'm forced to post some Madonna Ent fic. First posted as a comment in ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
lobelia321's LJ, as she was strange enough to request it, but she pointed out that it was behind a cut. So here it is again. It's just a snippet, so you can consider it a warning. There's plenty more where this came from.
Madonna checked her email again. Nothing. She sipped her Evian and stared out of the window. Outside, the bland Californian sun beat down, slowly frying the garden to a crisp.
There seemed to be something stuck in her eye.
Bitches.
Why wouldn't Ents call each other 'Babe', anyway?
lobelia321's LJ, as she was strange enough to request it, but she pointed out that it was behind a cut. So here it is again. It's just a snippet, so you can consider it a warning. There's plenty more where this came from.Madonna checked her email again. Nothing. She sipped her Evian and stared out of the window. Outside, the bland Californian sun beat down, slowly frying the garden to a crisp.
There seemed to be something stuck in her eye.
Bitches.
Why wouldn't Ents call each other 'Babe', anyway?
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Now here we have a good example of internal focalization and style indirect libre. To explain: the focalizer is he whom we see the action through, or in this case, she. Madonna. She is our pov. And it's internal because we're inside her head and we see her thoughts. (So it's tell!! And not show!!!!)
Free indirect style: because there are no declarative words surrounding her thoughts (she said to herself. it occurred to her that ents were babes) but the thoughts are presented as a seamless one with the rest of the narrative.
The seemed, however, is not internal. That is external. Here we have the narratrix interfering and coming in with her own comments. Because to Madonna it wouldn't "seem" as if she had something in her eye.
Um, I could go on. But I am getting carried away. Narratology does strange things to me.
But: Madonna! Ents! And if they call each other 'babe': entwives?????????? It's girlslash, it is!!!!!!!
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Wheeee, this is actually rather fascinating. I was going to sit and write the scene again in a different style and see what Gennette would have to say, but I am being made to GO TO WORK instead! I am OUTRAGED at the unfairness of the universe!
Entwife girlslash eh? It's a possibility.
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