sheldrake

*snogs you*

Happy-making feedback, this.

I'd also like to say that the setting is so evocative, and that I also found this all incredibly sexy.

Thank you, thank you, thank you! Because I'm never convinced that sexy is really one of my strengths, and I did actively want this story to be sexy, and not just an angst-fest (although that's fine too). So I'm over the moon that you said that!

I think he can't see Orli just as much as he can't see himself clearly.

Yup, that's really interesting, and I think you're right.

And I felt like there was some undercurrent of...something...about Orli not hanging with Viggo that weekend...and that Viggo was with Sean.

Ahahaha! You got it! Yes!! *does little dance*
The thing is with this story, I spent so much time angsting over whether it actually had anything to do with the lyrics, because those two lines seemed to suggest a kind of triangular relationship, and originally the story was very much about Orlando really wanting Viggo, and Elijah not being Viggo, and there was a whole load of dialogue and exposition all about that, which got scrapped. Because in the end the story was so obviously going to be about Orlando and Elijah, and this one evening. But I wanted to leave the Viggo stuff in the background, and I rather hoped people might pick up on it. I'm still not sure I succeeded in doing that, but it makes me really happy that you found it, at least. Yay!

Thank you, Shriney!